Author’s note: Today I was having trouble thinking of what
to write so I just decided to think as I write. Hopefully this might turn out
well.
In the
town of Pewaukee, Wisconsin, Seth had been running from police for quite some
time. He had been driving his motorcycle for a while and he was running out of
gas. He was about to jump until a giant 15-seat car drove up next to him.
Driving the car was Jack. He opened the passenger door and yelled for Seth jump
in. Once Seth was in the car they drove towards the school district. On their
way, they called their friends and told them to come in front of the school.
Once they arrived, their 11 friends, piled into the back seats. Jack told
everyone that they were going on a road trip while running from the cops.
Before
they left town, they went through a Taco Bell drive through. They also stopped
at Wal-Mart and bought loads of snacks and movies for on the road. Just before
they reach Chicago, they stopped at a RV retailer. They bought the largest RV
with the penny they found outside the building. They then made shifts for
driving. Seconds after hitting the road again, the police were right behind
them.
Once
they reached Chicago, they stopped at a gas station and bought gas, more
movies, subs for dinner, and 2 lottery tickets. They drove for two more hours
before they found a spot to hide in a state forest. When they woke up, a cute
family of beavers was outside. Jack decided to adopt them. Once they were on their
way, they stopped at a pet store to get beaver food. Seth asked Jack how he got
all this money and he said he found it in his couch. They got McDonald’s for
breakfast and decided to drive to Maine. When they were at a gas station in
Indiana, they met Andrew Luck. He said that he wanted to come too. Seth didn’t
want him to but he gave in when he was bribed with 750,000 dollars and a shiny
penny.
Jack
decided that he wanted to go to Texas first. It was 1 A.M. when they finally
got to Dallas. Jack was walking to a Target when he ran into Tony Romo and
Jason Witten. They wanted to come too. Jack agreed under one condition, that
they would buy 3 more RVs. The next morning on the way out of town 3 more RVs
were purchased and hooked up.
Five hours
later, in Arkansas, they ran into a huge family. They called themselves the
Duggers. Tony Romo said that they have a TV show that he watches. Jason told
them to get on and it was too late for Jack to stop them. By nightfall, They
reached Greensboro, North Carolina. Theo, one of Jack’s friends, said his
cousins lived here so they went to their house. They joined the crew bringing a
fridge full of food.
The
next day they arrived in Maine at 6:30 in the afternoon. The three football
players went out fishing. They came back with 46 lobsters, 51 crabs, and 4
buckets of shrimp. The group had a feast. Just before they finished, they were surrounded
by police. One officer walked up to
Seth. He said, “Why were you running from me? I just wanted to ask you if you
were the person who caught the home run at the Brewer’s game last week.
However, since you ran from us, why don’t we have fun chasing you again. I’m
giving you 15 minutes from the time your car’s engine starts.”
Seth
told everyone to get into their assigned RV and bring some of the food and
movies with them. In 10 minutes, they were on the road again. In the car, was
Jack, Seth, Theo, and the beavers. After 15 minutes, they were almost to Canada.
Jack thought that if they drove across Canada and enter the U.S. again in
Washington, the police would have trouble finding them.
After
driving for one and ½ days without stopping, the crew had reached Seattle. It
was a Tuesday morning and the night before the Green Bay Packers had lost to
the Seahawks. Seth ran into three Seahawks players, Russell Wilson, Golden
Tate, and Marshawn Lynch. They bought another trailer and hooked it up. It was late afternoon when the group arrived
in the Rocky Mountains. The decided to build a permanent camp in a clearing the
found. In the middle of the camp, they made a semicircle of RVs around a camp
fire.
The
next morning Seth, Jack, and Matt, another friend, went to a nearby town. They
came back with two new pickup trucks plus the original car full of food. They made 50+ trips throughout the day bringing
building supplies, tools, and clothes to the base. They also brought one more
RV. By the end of the day, they had built 3 small cabins to cook in, a wall
around the base with a raising gate, and a pet hotel for the beavers.
Throughout
the next month, they had constructed a mansion that had ports for each car and
RVs to dock in and a helipad for the new helicopter they purchased. Then, after
a month of searching, the police spotted them. They were so impressed of the
fort that they asked if they could join too. Seth and Jack let them.
They grew
stronger and lived happily ever after. Except, that’s not what happenned. No one likes
stories that end that way. They colony
grew so strong that they began taking over the state of Colorado. The
government soon noticed this and began to attack them. Just before they
launched the attack, Damian Cray (from Eagle Strike Alex rider series) had
launched every missile the US owned at Colorado. The colony ended in a giant
fiery ball. The lesson here is: if you catch a home run, give the ball to the
person next to you.
Nice story. Maybe next time you could make your story flow a little better, instead of stuff happening right out of the blue. Also, check your conventions, there were a few spelling and grammar mistakes. With your conclusion you could say what you wanted the reader to get from the story, without saying "This is the lesson...". Overall a pretty good, and funny, story.
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